"TOBY, I AM DISAPPOINT" and "I Don't Know How, But"

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Alright, this is not a joke. These are serious poems, okay. Please keep that in mind. ; (

TOBY, I AM DISAPPOINT

Toby, you were cute.
Even though you had a fucked-up body.
Your back-left leg . . . was like shit.
But, anyway, I did not mind.

Toby, you wagged your tail.
Even though you had a fucked-up body.
And, then, you shat.
Mind this I, indeed, did.

TOBY, I AM DISAPPOINT.
You disrespected me in front of teh kids.
So, I brought down the hammer with great might and furious anger.
And smashed your fucking face.

I Don’t Know How, But

I was walking along, and
I don’t know how, but
I fell into a time warp, and
I FUCKING HATE TIEM WARPZ, and
yo momma’s big, fat, ugly ass
and asshole.

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you beat your 4 legged pet with a hammer? didn’t you mean “disappointed”?

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ur a bad person
you should feel bad

  • Dr. Zoidberg
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your imagery and diction is very crude, however intentional it may be. The first poem could have been something substantial if not for comparisons such as ‘your back-left leg… was like shit’ . maybe it’s the mental state of the character you’re trying to create, but due to the similar nature of your second poem… i doubt it