i like to write from time to time
im not very major when it comes to grammar soo 
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My favorite of the three was “As I Fall.” Nice premise.
The thing I see with your writing is the grammar. I know you said that it’s not your forte, but in order to help your reader flow with you, it needs to be worked on a little. There were parts where I had to reread in order to catch the meaning. Too much effort. Also, for the last piece, you may need to add some punctuation. Without it, I got the feel that it was to be read quickly and without stop. I’m not sure if that was the goal for which you were looking.
All in all, I could see the expressions and thoughts in the writing, but if you make it more clear with correct grammar and punctuation, your message will be able to reach others with much more clarity.
thanks man , yeah i know , these are my old works and
i have been working on that a lot lately , hopefully i will have some up soon