Oooooooooo, the touch of death. Neato. I’m a little disapointed, since you ended the chapter so abruptly. By the way, are they ever gonna go after the guy that offed their pops?
Happy Presents Day!
Yes, They will have their revenge on the General.
And Happy Presents Day to you too and everyone:lol:
Bring the chapters faster…
:o
Oh yea, will Goutetsu and Master Fei fight ? That would be something to see…
Hey, another chapter is up!
Puts down shotgun
This chapter has brought you 30 days more to live. Enjoy it.
Continues to write Warrior’s Saga while sharpening Katana…
Wow, everytime I read your work it gets better and better. you really are a talented writer. The way you describe the fight scenes, the emotions of the boys and even the character development is great. I give you mad props and hope to read one of your books in the future. Take your time with the next chapter though, I’m sure to make the chapters that good you have to take your time to do it eh?
Chaotic Blue
Chaotic Blue:
bump
I’m working on the next chapter.
No I haven’t died or anything:sweat:
You will soon if you don’t finish.:evil:
takes a couple of practice swings with katana
I agree.
hops into Tallgeese III and check if all the parts are functioning normally. :evil:
Ok, I just got back to this after a long hiatus, and I must say this is the most outstanding thing you have ever written. Seriously. I don’t know why you keep calling it crap, it’s great. So just stfu and write.
Where’s chapter 13, you BUM?!? I saw you working on it today.
whips out stabbin knife to join Milliardo and Shin
Follow me, guys, I know where he lives:evil:
Extends Tallgeese III’s hand
C’mon, hop on.
Tallgeese III stands up
Show me the way. :evil:
Aim the Mega Cannon at Fof’s house
FOF, can ya hear me?? no new chapter today and your house will be blown to smithreens!!!
Damn, FistsofFury…after going through all the pages, reading the story up to Ch. 12, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Mad props to ya. You certainly convey the atmosphere and setting of the text really well…especially when you unravel the various battles between Gouken or Gouki, and whoever else that is getting the ass-whoopin’. I’m not the type to rush people to get things done, so you won’t find me asking, “Is it done yet?” and stuff like that. We all got shit to do :). Keep up the good work dude.
Chapter XIII: Peculiar Dance
The sun stood in the middle of the sky, it?s radiance too beautiful for human eyes to directly cast their gazes. The clouds were light and playful, dancing through a light blue sky like children in an open field. Below on Earth, another battle was set to take place.
Gouken cracked his knuckles as he let his lips curve into a smirk. Gen was powerful, and Gouken was anxious to begin.
?Alright, ready?? He asked, Gen nodded silently.
?Let?s go!? Gouken shouted as he rocketed forward and cocked his fist behind him.
?WAIT! You can?t fight now?.? Master Fei said as he smiled.
?What? Why not?? Gouken stared up at the master with a puzzled face, the lower half of his body frozen in mid gallop as his upper body relaxed.
?Gen?s last fight was draining, you?d have an unfair advantage.? Master Fei said matter of factly, with his index finger pointing at an imaginary chalkboard in front of him.
?And you do want to fight Gen at his best correct??
?Yes.? Nodded Gouken.
?Then it?s settled, tomorrow at noon, the fight will resume. Do you think that this is fair?? Master Fei looked over at Goutetsu who wasn?t paying attention, staring up at the clear blue sky.
?Oh?yeah sure.? He nodded rapidly.
Then Gouki stirred, he coughed up a bit of blood and sat up, clutching his side with an expressionless face and closed eyes.
?Gouki, come. Afaik will-? Goutetsu started.
?No.?
Gouki?s voice was the most serious and stern Gouken had ever heard it at that moment. He stared at Goutetsu, his eyes burning into him with rage for even suggesting the idea. He closed his eyes; avoiding all contact and began to return to his feet, stumbling. Gouken stared forward to help him. Gouki turned his back to him and slowly walked away from the battle, limping and not acknowledging anyone?s presence.
?Hmmm?he has a strong sense of personal honor and dignity.? Master Fei noted to his peer.
?You?re confusing it?he?s too headstrong. Dignity doesn?t exclude getting help when you need it. Gouki may not show it, but part of him is arrogant. And he will not look at us?because he is humiliated. Even his best isn?t good enough for him?.that could get him in trouble. Gouki, above all else wants to be strong?stronger than his brother?stronger than me?stronger than anyone. I?m beginning to realize that now?and I fear for him.?
?Hmmmm?maybe but I doubt it.? Replied Master Fei with a sharp smile. Goutetsu did not acknowledge the unnecessary remark, for he felt Fei was in no position to make judgements of his student?s character after only a few hours.
Gouken watched Gouki leave, staring at him as his wounded brother limped away, his black gi dark as midnight spotted with drips of crimson blood and dust. The wind suddenly picked up slightly, playing with Gouki?s long hair and stirring the cloth on his gi as Gouken silently watched. Gouki walked onward, and after a minute he was out of sight.
Gouken turned around to face Gen; only Gen wasn?t there. Gouken turned again, to find Master Fei and Goutetsu gone also.
?Hmph.? Gouken shrugged as he walked away from the arena, wondering if Afaik had any extra rice cakes left.
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The cry of a hungry wolf echoed in the distance, the moon full and the sky a sort of comforting deep violet. It was comforting to Gouki at least, who sat on a large ancient boulder overlooking a great cliff that dropped off into a luscious green forest a hundred feet below.
Sleep did not come to Gouki this night, he tossed and turned?.the pain from his injures flaring up in pulsing throbs. After several hours, he gave up and walked outside. Gouki?s right arm was in a sling, his entire left forearm bandaged, a wrapping that streaked across his chest, and a bandage over his left cheek. The shirt of his gi flopped unto the rock; he had discarded it to feel the mountain air on his skin.
WHAM!
A flashback of his fight with Gen shot forward in Gouki?s mind, a crane peck that connected in the center of Gouki?s chest. Gouki felt the spot on his flesh where the attack connected; a bruise had been left there.
Gouki grimaced as he thought more about the fight. Gouki thought he could keep up, but Gen just proved to be better. Gouki had, like every fight previously, poured everything he had into it. And lost?again.
What sickened Gouki the most would be what was coming in the daylight. Tomorrow, Gouken would step and fight Gen and beat him effortlessly. Gouki knew it, he could not deny it. Gouki stared at his fist, his fist bandaged and broken?..a fist inadequate compared to his brother.
Damn them both?.. Was the only thought that came to his mind, his fist clenched and quivering as he noticed he was grinding his teeth.
Gouki suddenly stood up, and walked forward, his eyes concentrated on the moonlight. He stopped, and mechanically took stance. His face hard and cold. He clenched his fists and began to raise his ki.
?HAH!!? Gouki shouted as he shot forward his cupped arms, unleashing a ki blast into the midnight wilderness. But the blast only moved a couple of feet before it shattered into thin air. Gouki?s concentration was broken once he fell to his knees, clutching his side in terrible pain.
Blood began to seep through Gouki?s clenched teeth, and fall to the ground in little crimson drops, sweat beaded all over Gouki?s body as he lay doubled over in pain. His injuries would not allow him to train tonight. He refused Afaik?s healing to feel the fire of failure spreading from his injuries. He wanted the reminder to stay there until his body overcame it naturally.
The throbbing pain that racked Gouki?s entire body had returned as an owl sailed high in the sky under the moonglow; it?s piercing eyes locked on a companion in the night.
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- The next day, noon
Gouken bounced in place, excited about his next fight. The battle was set to begin in a little under 20 minutes, and Gouken had been ready since he first jumped out of bed. Gouken tore through breakfast like a wild man and then ran off to go meditate; only he was too excited to really empty his thoughts.
The sky was quiet and calm, the clouds thin and the sun content. Gouken was dressed in a tan gi, the sleeves torn off the shirt, and a black thick wool shirt underneath with no sleeves also. His hair was cut no more than 2 inches off his head and it was actually straight for once. A thin goatee lined his handsome face, with eyes that gleamed confidence and a child-like giddiness.
?Man?I?m ready to begin! Where is everyone!?? Gouken exclaimed.
?Right here.? A cold, dead voice uttered from behind. Gouken whirled around to find Gen staring at him, his pit viper eyes locked on a new target.
?Ah there you are. So are you ready to begin? No matter if the masters aren?t here, they?ll catch up.?
?Fine.? Gen said, with a cunningly smirk.
The two fighters stood 40 feet apart from each other. Slowly sliding into stance. Both had confident smiles, and their stances tight and mechanical.
?Ready??? Gouken started, his muscles tense.
?GO!?
They both rocketed forward running at top speed, adrenaline pumping through their bodies like normal blood. They crossed the distance to each other in 2 seconds, and just before impact both fighters sprang 20 feet into the air.
?HAH!? Gouken attempted a couple jabs which Gen swatted away, and retaliated with a front kick which Gouken blocked with his knee. They exchanged punches and kicks at lightning fast rates as both of them hung in mid-air, beginning to fall back to Earth.
Gen lashed out with a right hook, Gouken caught his fist and kicked him away, knocking him out of the sky. Gen sailed to the ground with a dead thud, kicking up dust but quickly returning to his feet, undeterred.
Gouken still was in the air, falling as Gen rushed forward at the place where he would land, planning to meet him on the way down. Gouken?s mind jumbled a plot together quickly.
Gouken performed two quick backflips, enough to propel himself a little backward away from Gen?s clutches. Gen shot forward anyhow, right into Gouken?s plan.
As soon as Gouken hit the ground he unleashed a Hadoken so quickly Gen ran into it more than the ki ball ran into him. Gen was blown back 10 feet, crashing to the ground and remaining still for half a minute.
Gouken stood, a clever smile on his face as he folded his arms in an almost pout.
?C?mon Gen?that didn?t hurt. Quit playing possum.? He scolded, laughing. Gen quickly sprang to his feet, calmly wiping dust and dirt off of his clothes, his confident smirk still present.
?You are?.stronger than your brother.?
?A lot of people say that.?
Gouken and Gen once again snapped back into fighting mode, their bodies slowly relaxing and no traces of exertion in their forms. Suddenly, a voice rang out!
?Why you overzealous punks!!? Master Fei shouted indignantly as he half ran, half walked up the fighting grounds, showing his small pot belly underneath his robe. He looked flustered. Goutetsu calmly walked to the arena beside Fei, in a time-worn gray Chinese gi, his traditional long thick braid dangling behind him and a content smile on his face.
?How dare you two start before we arrive! Do you not have respect for your superiors!? Master Fei roared.
?Um?sorry Master Fei. We were just anxious to begin?.? Gouken muttered.
?HUFF Well you could have told someone! I wanted to see this! Now I?ve missed the beginning!? Goutetsu couldn?t help but laugh as Master Fei?s face became a beet red over something so trivial.
?It?s alright Fei, the fight barely began?you didn?t miss much.?
? A thousand apologies masters.? Said Gen, his voice almost sincere.
?Yes well you both should be sorry.? Said Fei with finality.
Gouken suddenly noticed something, his brother standing away from everyone, watching the match with an unreadable face.
?Feel free to continue at any moment.? Muttered Goutetsu cheerfully.
?Alright! Round 2!? Gouken roared with enthusiasm as he suddenly hoped back into stance. Gen snapped back into combat mode himself.
Gen wordlessly blasted into the air with a flying kick, which Gouken swatted away with ease. Gen then struck out with 5 jabs from the left hand, a right hook followed by a front kick?all in the space of 2 seconds. Gouken deflected and guarded against all of these attacks, his confidence never waning.
Gouken then struck back, elbowing Gen in the chin then punching him on the stomach twice. Gouken finished with a sharp roundhouse; only Gen recovered too soon and caught his leg with one hand.
?Shit.?
Gouken said, with a lighthearted tone and his trademark smile. Gen stared at his opponent with his pit viper eyes. They both knew what was coming next.
WHAM!!
The following attack made Gouken fly 8 feet into the air and rotate a full 720o before he smacked the hard tile 12 feet away from Gen.
Gouken rose quickly again without a stumble or a blink, not caring to brush any debris from his garment.
The second Gouken took stance Gen pounced again; with a swift crane peck that Gouken narrowly avoided, taking a step back in the process. Gen countered with a quick palm strike to Gouken?s chest with his other hand, knocking Goutetsu?s student off balance. Gouken recovered in time to swat away another crane peck and attack with a overhead right, which Gen blocked with his forearm, using the same arm to backfist Gouken across the cheek. Gouken then faked a right hook, only to knee Gen in the stomach and performed a hammerfist to the back of his exposed head. They continued to fight like this, countering each other?s moves in a crisp sharp dance. Fighting fast enough to not get bored, but slow enough so their audience would be pleased with their usage of learned techniques. This continued for another 5 minutes until Goutetsu interrupted them.
?Haha! What do you take us for?! A bunch of old men with failing eyesight! You know you can fight faster than that Gouken and Gen, stop fooling around and get to the point. You show-offs.? Goutetsu added the last point with a chuckle.
?You hear that pal? They want us to cut to the chase. What do you say Gen? Shall we skip the pleasantries?? Gouken questioned, that fire of competition burning in his eyes. Gen nodded in response.
?Alright. Glad to see that we?re in agreement here.? Gouken said lightly as he tossed off his gi shirt, exposing his lean and strong chest. Gen tossed aside his white shirt also, the sweat on his skin glistening in the sun.
Gen hoped into stance, only this time it was different. One arm, the arm in front was that of crane while the arm in back was of tiger. Gen?s smirk remained.
?Ah?combined styles eh? I?ve seen this before. Let?s go.? Gouken took stance, only he tossed aside the traditional form of his style; bouncing in place with both fists in front and clenched.
?HAH!? Gouken shouted as he rocketed towards his opponent, kicking up a trail of dust and he ran at top speed, his arms pumping in the air.
Seconds before contact Gouken hoped in the air, performed a dropkick on the surprised Gen. Gen flew back 10 and skidded across the ground another 5. As soon as he returned to his feet Gouken was upon him again, a swift right hook to Gen?s chin that knocked the Chinese fighter to the ground once again. On the ground Gen fought, deflecting Gouken?s relentless attacks while trying to stand up. He scooted across the ground swatting away punches, chops, and kicks with blazing speed. Finally Gen hoped up and performed a spinning aerial roundhouse, flooring Gouken in half of a second.
Gouken quickly snapped back, his back straight and his body pumping with energy. He took a couple steps back, and returned to stance.
?Hmm?.they both love this. I can see it in their eyes?? Said Goutetsu to himself, stroking his beard as the sun stared in awe.
FOF…
i heart you
Can’t leave it like that FOF, nevertheless good chapter…wonder what Akuma is gonna do to revenge his defeat ?
Good. Very good.
Puts away katana and resets hour glass
You have 30 days…
So, like what does everyone think of the story so far? Hmmm?
Gimmie feedback, and put away those katanas:p
stares at millardo and mega huge mobile suits
:lol:
What is everyone’s opinon of the characters?
Gouki
Gouken
Goutetsu
Afaik
Gen
Master Fei
so what does everyone think???
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Gouki seems like the headstrong child who wont let anything get in his way. Unfortunately he doesn’t seem to be able to deal with losing. Henchforth he should never be able to beat his brother until he can learn from his past mistakes and make those his weaknesses. He seems to get enraged when he loses and in arrogance, shuns everyone and everything away. ahh. what a lonely life Gouki has in store for himself.
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Gouken is like me playing video games. Confident, and giving everything his all. Learning from each mistake through experience rather than constant studing, unlike his brother. Experience usually takes someone further than book studies, so i would say that Gouken would end up being the stronger of the two.
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Goutetsu (everyone’s name starts with Gou huh?) is the patient teacher. Firm yet easy going, relaxed yet never off guard. He seems like he’s seen alot during his years and he lives his life in peace with nature, and all that stuff. He reminds me kind of like Hiko Seijuro (minus the supreme arrogance).
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Afaik is Goutetsu’s wife. Umm, little is known about Afaik, i mean, umm. just little about her personality. The first sentance sums her up pretty well.
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Gen is Master Fei’s student. He hasn’t said much nor had hardly any lines at all. So, of course little is known of him. The story is about Gouki after all anyway.
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Master Fei is the rival of Goutetsu. A rivalry that seems to only be on Master Fei’s mind. I don’t think Goutetsu really cares for the old rivalry that he and Master Fei once shared. Fei must have been the weaker of the two. He seems to have something to prove to Goutetsu. Too bad he can’t see that Goutetsu doesn’t really care. Or does he… dun dun DUNNNNNN!
Overall, good shit on the story, very well done!
Chaotic Blue
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Gouki just wants to win, demolishing anybody in his path from accomplishig this goal. But he takes his defeat to hard, instead of getting angry he should replay the fight in his mind over and over and learn from the mistakes he may have made not to do them again in his next match.
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Gouken is happy go lucky, he loves the fight with just as much passion and determination like his brother but doesn’t let it consume him to the point of anger when he loses.
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Master Goutetsu, the wise, strong and patient teacher. Very cool calm and collective, doesn’t let anything bother him.
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Afaik, she seems just as patient and calm as her husband.
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Gen loves the thrill of the fight just as much as Gouki does, but also is more cockier than him too.
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Master Fei, still jealous of his rival Goutetsu after all these years. Goutetsu could care less…