Ummmm, don’t say that. To long of a wait…
:lol:
Just a quick question on the Zan’Ei (Gen’s rushing super) :
What does the move really does? Does it kill the opponent?
good shit fof as always remember just because people are not replying dosent mean their not reading tha story.
Seriousily you should do a fan fiction novel or something. Your writing is amazing so quit being so damn humble i.e “my writing sucks”
agreed.:lol:
Hey FoF, put it in separate chapters. I can’t PM you now, your folder is full.
separate chapters? ok.
Hm…
This fic has now reached Novella status (at least 17,500 words but less than 40,000 words) at 21,129 words total.
Wait…how many people here have a clue what I’m talking about?:lol:
ummm, none what so ever.
:o
Chapter X: Seeds of Discontent
?ACK!? Gouken yelped a startled cry as he was flung into the flat face of a large stone boulder, bouncing off vertical stone wall with a wet slap. Gouken crashed to the ground and immediately sprang to his feet, a fierce and busy look in his eyes. He didn?t bother to wipe a bit of blood from the corner of his mouth on his fist, not daring to relax his hands and drop his guard.
WHAM!
A loud raw thud resonated throughout the forest, and a split-second later Gouki was sailing through the air, smacking the brown earth hard in front of the worried Gouken.
Gouki lifted his head toward his brother, his face smeared with dirt and brown leaves, and he had landed face-first, and it was autumn. The ground was an ocean of browns, yellows, and oranges?the leaves growing tired of the monotony of hanging off branches?now they had decided to fall and meet their respective fates. The trees swayed with the slight wind to a rhythm only they could hear, the skies a dismal and stoic gray, the clouds bored and the sun half-asleep.
Gouki snapped back up and faced the enemy alongside his brother, both in a crisp fighting stance?.their uniforms peppered with grass stains and dirt.
?We need a better plan.? Gouki said without looking at Gouken…keeping his eyes on his opponent.
?Well, if you have one let?s hear it.? Was Gouken?s response.
Gouki shook his head slowly as Gouken sighed. They stared at their opponent, neither moving as the wind kicked up some leaves, the brown specks fluttering through the air like a drunken bumblebee.
?Attack me! If you do not move?I will force you to move!!? Goutetsu shouted from a distance as he shot his open palms forward, a small red ball of ki the size of a basketball shot forward at lightning speed towards his students, kicking up leaves as it ran through the cold, still air.
Gouken and Gouki sprang away from the rock in opposite directions as the blast hit the stone boulder, smashing it to pebbles. Clouds of dust that were once solid stone hung in the air around the two brothers as they stared in disbelief at their master.
?Come on! Let?s attack together!? Gouken screamed as he took off running towards his opponent, Gouki nodded and ran at full-gallop towards the same person. Their mouths open as they yelled, their fists tight at their waists?..their feet a blur.
?NOW!? Screamed Gouken and Gouki leapt off the ground with a quick spin that formed itself into a flying kick.
?HAAAAAAA!? Gouken shouted as he quickly pulled his hands behind him, waited a couple seconds, then lashed out with a Gou-Hadoken, the glimmering ball of white ki shaped like a raindrop falling horizontally.
?Hehe?.? Goutetsu muttered as he quickly spun with a roundhouse, catching the kicking Gouki dead in the chest?knocking him into a tree trunk 25 feet away. He then spun back around and with a flick of his wrist, swatted away Gouken?s ki blast?.the white ball shattered into a million glowing pieces as it hit a tree nearby?leaving a slight indentation in the tree itself.
Gouken was unfazed as he ran up to Gouken and punched. Goutetsu punched away his student?s fist and retaliated with a punch of his own; a punch Gouken swatted away. Gouken tried a front kick, but Goutetsu?s feet were faster?.a swift kick in the chest knocked the young student to the ground before Gouken?s leg could fully extend.
As soon as Gouken smacked the ground he leapt back up?.continuing the fight. They exchanged punches and kicks?Goutetsu?s movements precise and quick while Gouken struggled to keep up. He had not been swept away in Goutetsu?s current of movement and for that he was glad.
Gouki slowly picked himself off the ground, leaning on the tree trunk as he groaned and felt his side. Then he looked up, and his eyes widened.
Gouken was still fighting Goutetsu. They moved around the forest as one blur?the echoes from the blows a symphony, the birds and trees invited listeners. Gouken suddenly ducked low dodging a kick form his master, and then narrowly avoided a chop. Gouken attacked with a right cross, a punch that died when Goutetsu caught it in his hand?bringing the action to a dead stop.
The forest echoed with the sharp sound made by the fist striking the open palm as the master and student stood silent, the mostly red and yellow canopy above them, the hard brown earth below. Gouken?s expression was one of total shock, then snapped to determination as the sparring continued, the two figures fighting fiercely, but at a stalemate.
Suddenly Goutetsu jumped back and fired a ki blast, Gouken reacted quickly by shooting off a blast of his own. The balls of red and white ki collided into each other, both shattering into small shimmering pieces.
?Smart move Gouken.? Said Goutetsu as he rushed in with a kick, a kick that young Gouken swatted away. Gouken was too busied with his master?s furious attacks to respond.
Gouki watched from the sidelines, in shock. Gouken is keeping up with master?. He thought to himself as he stared. Neither of them had last this long in a continuous exchange with Goutetsu before. Although Goutetsu was holding back, Gouki felt Goutetsu withholding less of his strength for every punch and kick of Gouken?s that connected. Gouken was doing well out there. Then he noticed where he was. He had been knocked down so quickly?.defeated so easily. And yet Gouken was keeping up with Goutetsu??.
He?s always stronger than me?.. Gouki thought, his sadness slowly turning to anger as he clenched his fists?continuing to watch the sparring.
WHAM! Goutetsu did a quick hammerfist to the side of Gouken?s head, knocking him to the ground covered with fallen leaves. This time Gouken did not jump back up.
?Ahhhhh??I?ve had enough.? Said Gouken as rose to one knee, spat and stood up to begin dusting himself off. His head was throbbing, his limbs were screaming in pain, and his body was close to exhausted.
?Well?.know this. You did well my student. You are progressing nicely.? Goutetsu muttered as he patted Gouken on the back, the way a proud father would congratulate a child.
?If you were fighting me for real, I would have lasted about 5 minutes with you.?
?That is longer than quite a few people I have fought. Gouki! Why did you not jump back in and join us?? Asked Goutetsu?Gouki looked up at them from a distance, his eyes wide.
?I?.I?.um?.? He stammered, he couldn?t find the words?they flooded his mind too quickly to come out.
?No matter. Come, maybe Afaik has finished dinner.? Goutetsu said as he mussed Gouki?s hair. The master and his students walked together, leaving the ocean of yellows, greens, reds and brown behind. To the silent applause of the forest.
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A framed picture, hung on the old wooden wall, the lack of color in the photos in stark contrast to the deep brown of the wood wall surrounding it. Beneath the picture, propped against the wall was a bookcase, filled with trophies and medals belonging to Gouken.
Gouki sat cross-legged on the floor; beneath him a thin straw mat separated his body from the hard planks. The light seeped in through cracks in the blinds, like swords of light slashing through darkness. Gouki faced the picture and the trophies, his face blank.
The large picture was of a jubilant Gouken, when he just was crowned champion of a tournament a couple years ago. He stood bloody and beaten, yet his face held the highest amount of joy possible, his eyes bright and his lips curved back in a huge smile, flashing his straight white teeth. The coordinator of the tournament was holding up Gouken?s hand, in the hand held a golden trophy a quarter of Gouki?s height. In the distance was Goutetsu, smiling proudly from the outskirts, his hands folded across his chest.
Gouki?s eyes wandered down from the picture to the bookcase stacked with awards. The golden cups and trophies, honorary black belts and gis?.all for Gouken. And Gouken was getting used to it. Gouki himself could not remember the last time his brother lost in tournament combat?.he was always ready for any challenge?he met it?and promptly crushed it.
Gouki stared at his brother?s winnings, feeling nothing. At least nothing he would admit to feeling. Slowly he turned to the opposite wall, and peered at his own winnings.
2nd and 3rd place trophies?.plagues?.brown belts. This is what lined Gouki?s wall. Silver and bronze were present instead of Gouken?s constant golds. Sure, capturing at least 3rd or better in every tournament one entered would be considered a high achievement for many, but Gouki was starting to wonder what was the point anymore. He stared at his winnings, dull and un-polished with fierce eyes. And every attempt to place further got him nowhere. The harder Gouki pushed, the more Gouken would slack?.yet the outcome was always the same.
Gouki, do not concern yourself with your brother?s progress?.jealously is a long, hard race and in the end it?s only with yourself. Connect with your energies?become one with your ki and your emotions?always be in control and many of your present worries will no longer matter?.
The words his master uttered long ago?.seemed almost irrelevant now. As far as Gouki was concerned he had become one with his ki and his emotions. He practiced diligently, mastering every move Goutetsu taught him?.yet still?he could never beat Gouken. Gouken always had some way?some come from behind tactic that never failed. Gouken?s natural talent for fighting?.coupled with minimal training?bested Gouki?s devotion. And it slashed through Gouki?s essence.
Why??..
The only word that came into Gouki?s mind?.echoing within his inner self. A thin whisper, and yet a deafening scream.
Suddenly Gouki stood, his face hard.
?I know what I must do.?
He said softly as he stepped out of the room, his fists balled so tight they quivered.
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?Ha!? Gouken shouted as he quickly exploded with a side kick, striking a dead tree so hard the trunk buckled under the power, minutes later the medium sized monolith began to tumble from the heavens, the crashing to the ground with a terrible thunder that made the Earth wince.
?Hehe?not too shabby.? Gouken said with a smile as he clapped his hands together, caked in dirt crumbling off them.
?Well, I think that?s enough for today?two hours a day?that?s my regimen and I?m sticking to it. Time to go eat some of that left-over Mezo soup Afaik prepared a couple days ago?.I liked that spice?..but I forgot the name?hmm?.? Gouki trailed off as he began to stroll out of the inner recesses of the forest, the leaves crunching beneath him.
?Gouken.? A soft voice said with unusual boldness, behind him. Gouken whirled around to find Gouki standing there, his face stoic.
?Yeah?? Asked Gouken quizzically.
?A match. Now.? Was all Gouki said, his eyes fierce as they burned into Gouken?s.
?What? Listen brother I?m a little tired right now-?
?DON?T MAKE EXCUSES!!? Gouki thundered as he shot his hands forward, a white ball of ki rocketed from them. Gouken?s eyes widened as he sprang out of the way just in time, the ki blast blowing past him and slamming into a distant tree far away. The two brothers could hear the tree tumble and crash to the ground, the earth rumbling beneath them.
Before Gouken could turn around and face his brother a fist buried itself into Gouken?s cheek, pushing Gouken backwards knocking him off-center. Gouken stumbled and Gouki pounced on him with a fury never seen before in the young student. Kicking him violently in the ribs, then grabbing him by his hair and kneeing him in the back.
?OUCH!? Gouken shouted as he fell backwards, disturbing a pile a resting leaves. Gouki took a couple steps backwards, breathing heavily, focused on his newfound opponent.
?Listen Gouki?..I really don?t feel like sparring right now?can?t we do this later?? Said Gouken as he got up, rubbing his cheek.
?SHUT UP!!? Screamed Gouki as he rushed in again, with a roundhouse that clipped the side of Gouken?s head. Gouki then punched Gouken in the stomach hard enough to double the older brother over in pain, his mouth and eyes wide.
?See?.how it feels?.? Gouki muttered under gritted teeth.
?What the hell is wrong with you?!? Gouken wheezed as he swatted Gouki?s fist away and leapt backwards, clutching his stomach?his face red.
?I?ve had enough?.you?re so damn arrogant?..? Gouki hissed as he charged his ki?.a white orb glowing his left palm.
?YOU?RE NOT STRONGER THAN ME!? Gouki screamed as he shot forward another Gou-Hadoken, twice the size of the previous one. Gouken leapt backwards again and retaliated with his own, both ki blasts collided with each other and died.
?I never said I was! What are you so angry about?!?
?You didn?t have to say it??? Gouki leapt forward with a flying kick that connected perfectly with Gouken?s chest, sending the brother careening into a tree trunk, a soft crack sounding from his body upon impact.
Gouken slowly got up?.his anger rising?that last attack hurt.
?You want to fight. Is that what you want?!? Screamed Gouken
?YES!?
?Then I?ll give you a fight. But be prepared, I?m not gonna hold back if you?re gonna act like a little bitch about it.? Gouken spat as he wiped a bit of blood from the corner of his mouth, then spit out some more unto the ground. He got up, and shifted into stance.
?Let?s go.? He said as he rocketed forward with incredible speed. Gouki shot forward himself with a quick front kick, only to strike an afterimage.
?Wha-? Gouki turned and then felt a hard elbow into his back, Gouken was behind him. Gouki stumbled and Gouken backfisted him across the cheek knocking him further away. Gouki fell to one knee as Gouken ran forward to top speed to engage him.
?I won?t let?.you?defeat me?not this time?.? Gouki whispered as he tightened his fist, his piercing eyes staring up at the approaching Gouken.
?HAH!? Gouken lashed out with a front kick, Gouki caught his brother?s leg, and grabbing it?hurled him into a tree. Gouken?s body went limp as it curled around the thick trunk, then crashed to the ground. Gouken wasted no time in getting up, sweeping Gouki as he returned to his feet. Before Gouki could hit the ground Gouken stuck him with a Gou-Shoryuken, knocking him 12 feet in the air and 15 feet away. Seconds later Gouki crashed to the ground, kicking up a pile of brown leaves.
Gouki struggled to his knees, but before he could get up Gouken kicked him, knocking him further back and to the ground again. Gouki tried to stand up again, Gouken head-butted him, sending Gouki?s face to the dirt once more. Gouki attempted to stand up a third time, he was successful as he swatted away Gouken?s knee and punched him in the face, giving him a black eye. Gouki then quickly turned and performed a reverse spinning elbow to Gouken?s face, breaking his nose. A move he had picked up from Go Hibiki himself. Gouken stumbled backwards and eventually fell feet away, blood leaking from his nose like the waterfall both brothers were so familiar with.
?You shouldn?t have done that?..? Gouken hissed, popping his nose back into place.
?What are you going to do about it?..brother.? Gouki spat the last word out, as if it disgusted him.
Before Gouken could reply, Gouki rushed in. Only to meet a fist to the stomach, followed by a kick to the head, a hammerfist to the temple, two more stomach jabs and a roundhouse that spiked him to the ground. Gouki sprang back up, only to stare up at an axe-kick that cut him right down again. Gouki smacked the hard earth, only to bounce back up with amazing speed.
To meet another fist from Gouken burying itself into Gouki?s stomach?so far it made the student of Goutetsu vomit blood.
The two stood there, Gouki?s body curved around Gouken?s outstretched fist, Gouki?s expression one of complete and utter agony while Gouken?s was purely vindictive. The time lurched, as Gouki?s eyes began to roll in the back of his head?wheezing for precious oxygen.
Finally Gouken retracted his fist and let his brother drop to the ground?clutching his stomach?his face buried in the dirt.
?You had it coming.? Gouken said flatly, as he turned his back to Gouki and began to leave, walking away from the forest and his fallen brother.
Gouki watched Gouken leave, his eyes flashing with anger?his body convulsing with potential hatred. He lay there, clutching his stomach and breathing heavily?for seemingly forever. White-hot tears ran uncontrollably down his face as the earth held him?.the cold icy grip of a contrived hug. The sun began to set, while Gouki still lay on the ground, his eyes staring at nothing and out of focus, his body completely still. The sun turned and watched him as she walked away, fearing for her two favored sons.
So it begins. Great chapter, but that doesn’t mean you can slack off.
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww but I wanna…
:lol:
no slacking off for you!!!
next chapter like NOW!!!1
He’s taking too long!!! Tell him again damn it!!!:mad:
GREAT chapter, i wonder what desperate measures Gouki will take at this defeat to his brother.
When’s the next chapter, can’t leave us hanging with an ending like that…gotta have more.
So when’s the next chapter…are you writing as we speak…huh…huh…huh ??? :lol:
Whoa… Whoa… Whoa… Nice fight!! I wanna next chapter now!!! :mad:
And… An extra note: NO slacking off!!!
no more replies??
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Not until we get a new chapter, like now!:mad:
its a great chapter FoF…
leaving us in suspence like always…
sibling rivalry is often good for kids…
but i wonder what will happen now…
thanks FoF…
I haven’t really kept up with your fic until today. I read all of it, and as per usual well done. I need to get back to my own fic…one day…
And that day is today. cracks the whip :mad: