your coloring and figures are very well executed. the line weight on your drawings make them pop out.
but i do have a few crits though/
i think your type is really hurting your drawings. you should never stretch type vertically or horizontally to fit certain spaces, it hurts the integrity of the design. some of your drawings are strong enough to do without type anyway.
also, in the last image, the character’s pose doesn’t look dynamic enough. it almost looks like she’s going to fall forward.
but i must say, your coloring is top notch if you just started out.
It’s funny, but that character would fit right into my friend’s comic. I like that pic. Nothing like a black woman with an afro. 
Please enter rising stars of Manga!!!
Yeah, I still have alot to learn. Coloring is still very new to me and I’m learning alot as I go along. I appreciate your crits and definitely will consider them. The stretched text was part of the design motif since I wanted it to look like sort of an old grind-house vibe mixed a little simple modern design. Its still pretty basic so I have to find ways to make the design better overall. I really am a noob at PS so I appreciate your comments and help.
I’ll post the finished one tonight also. Because of time constraints and me pushing myself to submit to a company I don’t have time to redraw Aishah unfortunately. I feel that the drawing is good enough for its purpose, but at the same time your comments will definitely cause me to be reinforce dynamism in future pieces. Thank you very much for your comments.
So like…yeah I re-drew Aishah cause her pose was awkward…I still have to fix her damn hand. Why is it that when I finish a pic there is ALWAYS something wrong that people can possibly point out, lol? No ones perfect I know, I just wish I was for one second lol
Anyways I’ll fix the hand later and do some colors and redesign the character cards.
http://expotato.deviantart.com/art/AISHAH-GARMAN-EX-ALPHA-86936061
I can see what you mean with the hand, but still baller. :tup: Glad to see you’re still at it.
done…
neat stuff man. Lines are crispy clean. The colors are simple, but they work well.
One thing I would critique on is how you handle wrinkles. They’re too rigid sometimes. What would make the wrinkles more convincing is if you have longer folds and wrinkles instead of just short ones. Gotta pay special attention to wrinkles around joints as well. I like to break down wrinkles into two types: thrust and crinkles. Thrust would be where fabric is being pulled, and crinkle-where fabric falls or compresses. If you haven’t already, I highly recommend the Dynamic Wrinkles book by Hogarth.
I really like this one http://forums.shoryuken.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=47236&d=1210295789
but the composition feel very unpolished. The texts are too forced like Toko said. Texts have shapes too so they should be treated as design elements or be kept minimal so they don’t clash with the composition. Right now the top left and right texts really takes away from the piece. I would take out “part time shuffle” since you already have it in the background, and move the bottom right texts somewhere where they’re not overlapping 3 elements at the same time.
Thanks for the crit…about wrinkles I could be a little timid but I really hate long lines that take away from the art so I tend to to make them too long unless someone is wearing something loose. I’ll look into messing around with it though. Apparently, I suck at design–maybe I should just hire someone to make the card and I just draw shit for it hahaha.
Hogarth is good but…for my style thats way too many lines for me–I’d have to find a middle ground. Thanks for the info and crit.
Yeah, Hogarth really exaggerates the wrinkles in his book but that’s just so you can clearly see how they are formed. You don’t have to copy them, as long as you get the basic idea.
JUST a placement pic–not a real pic, just wanted to see characters together.
i really like your style Nokato…makes me wanna start drawing again.
Ahem! sir
are u considering rising stars of manga yet? Lol
I’m sorry I always ask that when I see ur work
Yeah, I’m looking into it I’m just trying to make best quality work I can–the plague of an artist, its hard to ever feel like you’re ready but I’m forcing myself to do this to see what happens.
Thanks, that’s definitely much appreciated. I’m really hoping to get in the industry–I do get a little scared sometimes just because well its very competitive. Right now, I’m trying to put together a portfolio while working a desk job, so sometimes its pretty tough and I don’t always feel like I’m doing my best–but apparently some people can’t tell hopefully the editors won’t!
Anyways, I’ll have more to show later.
Poop…wip,
More to come
Cool pic. I would like to see how it looks in color. :tup:
meh. sketch I did at work–horribly rushed. Looks ok enough to post I guess…
http://expotato.deviantart.com/art/SLOPPY-CONCIOUSNESS-92022615