Hey Team, things seem to be a bit quiet around here at the moment, oh well. Here’s page 14
http://img477.imageshack.us/img477/9606/faith14colorweb3xf.jpg
If you’ve been reading and you wanna make a comment feel free. Anyone got an idea for a cover? I’m stumped!
Pretty sweet comic you got going man. I’d love to hear what inspired you to make the story/those characters. I find them to be interesting.
Could you PM me the page pls?
Munta: Sup Capt. Your story as well as your storytelling are both very good. The story is clever and engaging, and the storytelling is clear and easy to follow. The moods you set with the coloring are very successful too.
My main critique would be to work on you anatomy. Specifically for the heads. Here’s a head structure critique that I did for Banditchain in the challenge thread. Hehe, sorry to just copy/paste a critique, but I think the principles in it pretty much apply the same:
The blue shows vertical spacing, the green shows horizontal spacing, and the red shows how the nose, upper lip, and lower lip relate to each other horizontally:
http://img224.imageshack.us/img224/7194/seancharlieedit5sa.th.jpg
Also, I think that as far as rendering technique goes, try to avoid the dark smudging you have by the lineart sometimes. Keep the lineart crisp, and add shadows as shadow shapes, rather than darkness around contours.
Keep it up, dude!
Thanks for the comments guys.
I’m glad that everyones into the story.
Clear Sky: This is just a small part of a much larger story. Alot of people find they can relate to my characters which is nice. I’m trying to make my stories as human as possible.
Chain: Your the second person to hit me up about my whack anatomy. Sometimes my heads look spot on and other times just wrong. Thanks for the head structure critique. I have alot trouble with the placing of the chin sometimes and how far out the nose goes. I shall study it.
Kando also critted me on the smudging of my lines. I’ll try to avoid it next comic. I’m glad you like the story. It’s the part of the comic I hmmm and harrrrr about the most.
Page 16
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Finished!** Thanks for all your feedback guys. I might post the (very dated but entertaining) issue before this one.
Next comic is called “Self” Where Ol’ Micheal Valin has some inner demons and doubts to deal with.
I’ll take everyones feedback into account for the next issue. And if anyone has an idea for a cover, I’m all ears.
Cheers again everyone for your help along the way. And for taking the time to read.
will the guy trapped in concrete make a return?
Rage
is still embedded in concrete (In fact they might have built a building on him by now). So he won’t be making a return for a while now.
But RUSH, the most intense villian of the piece will make an appearance next issue. And Tane is back too.
I’ll post all of Trust here if thats cool with everyone. May make a new thread for it to avoid confusion.
The issue before this one is called “Trust”.
Cheers ToyRobotTerror :tup:
